Claim:
1. “Moreover, I am cognizant of the interrelatedness of all communities and states” (King 83).
The verb of the sentence is am, but I think the use of the adjective cognizant in conjunction with the verb am is a very compelling way for him to state his claim in this situation rather than choosing a simpler combination of verb and adjective in this situation.
2. “You deplore the demonstrations taking place in Birmingham” (King 83).
Agreement:
1. “We must come to see that, as the federal courts have consistently affirmed, it is wrong to urge an individual to cease his efforts to gain his basic constitutional rights because the quest may precipitate violence” (King 91).
2. ” In no sense do I advocate evading or defying the law, as would the rabid segregationist” (King 88).
Disagreement:
”In your statement you assert (1) that our actions, even though peaceful, must be condemned (2)because they precipitated (3) violence” (King 90).
Recommendation:
1. “Thus it is that I can urge men to obey the 1954 decision of the Supreme Court, for it is morally right; and I can urge to to disobey segregation ordinances, for they are morally wrong” (King 88).
2. ” I submit that an individual who breaks a law that conscience tells him is unjust, and who willingly accepts the penalty of imprisonment in order to arouse the conscience of the community over its injustice, is in reality expressing the highest respect for law” (King 88-9).
My Paragraph:
Parents have a responsibility to make effective life decisions for their young children; decisions that will steer them towards success and happiness, as corny as it might sound. As a parent, you have the opportunity to enroll your child into a variety of programs or organizations that are meant to broaden their horizons and foster friendships and personal growth. Getting your child involved in community programs can be equated to insuring their future is full of taken opportunities and inimitable life experiences. Many times the first place parents gravitate towards is the Girl Scouts/ Boy Scouts of America, overlooking other organizations, such as 4-H, that may just be the superior option. While each organization has its own strengths and weaknesses that should be considered when determining which program would best serve your child and family, I am a firm believer that 4-H has the most to offer its participants.

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March 25, 2008 at 6:45 pm
crandella802
I liked your paragraph in which you discussed the responsibility of a parent and the different programs that parents can get their children involved in. I think that you could address why parents “gravitate” towards Girl Scouts and Boy Scouts. Also why do you believe that 4.H has the mos to offer to its participants?
March 25, 2008 at 8:35 pm
cutticap
Great job with the verbs! We had some of the same examples, so we both did it right!
Your topic for your paper is pretty unique. I never would have thought to make that into a persuasive essay. I firmly agree with you that getting involved as young as possible is a very wise decision. I never attended 4-H or Girlscouts so reading your entry was interesting. For the paper, consider adding in more statistical/factual evidence to back up/contradict your own views.
March 26, 2008 at 8:58 pm
carawhalen
I thought that you did a great job addressing the situation and then clearly stating which side you are arguing. Maybe if you add a little more description, or strong verbs into your paragraph this could help show a more agressive stance. Overall, I really like your topic (go country people! lol) and through you brought forth a wonderful argument.
March 26, 2008 at 10:47 pm
sjordan740
I enjoyed how you began your paragraph because I felt as though I was being pulled in inch by inch. This kind of hits home, since My aunt made me join “Brownies” when I was little because it was something for me to do and it gives back to the community. But as for 4-H I can remember always wanting to be apart of that. You have a great topic…but for the paper I would consider looking at all the programs that give back to the community…such as girl scouts…..boy scouts….brownies….and why you feel 4-H outweighs all of them! Great Job